Okay - 3 polished and tweaked here and there. You can probably start thinking in pictures for these. More to follow as and when.
There once was a boy who was scared of his bed, For sleep, he believed, would wind up with him dead. Mother and father said, “There’s nothing to fear”, As his door they shut tight, saying “Go to sleep, dear!”
But the boy, he knew better. The boy was aware that his bed was a monster and his room was its lair. So night after night, and despite ma and pa’s prattle, The boy and his bed waged their ongoing battle.
Out go the lights, next, a sickening motion As the boy’s wall-to-wall carpet becomes deep like the ocean Where somewhere below in all that fathomless dark His bed circles slowly like a ravenous shark.
There once was a boy who was scared of his bed, For sleep, he believed, would wind up with him dead. Mother and father said, “There’s nothing to fear”, As his door they shut tight, saying “Go to sleep, dear” ¬
But the boy, he knew better. The boy was aware that his bed was a monster and his room was its lair. So night after night, and despite ma and pa’s prattle The boy and his bed waged their ongoing battle.
First out go the lights, next, a sickening motion As the boy’s wall-to-wall carpet becomes deep like the ocean Where somewhere below in all that fathomless dark His bed circles slowly like a ravenous shark.
So still must the boy be - he can't lose his head. Or lose it he will between the jaws of his bed It’s down there, he knows it and it’s coming up fast! So high up on the wardrobe he climbs like a mast.
The boy’s eyes are so heavy, and yet sleep he must never For his bed never rests in its dreadful endeavour. And now like tendrils its sheets they encircle his tummy So as to wrap the boy up and wrap him tight as a mummy.
Stuck fast like a bug, and his bonds getting tighter He sees the bed creep toward him, not a shark now, a spider! But the boy can’t escape! He gives a blood-curdling scream! “Oh, but darling” his mum says. “It’s just a bad dream!”
They boy tells them ‘No!’ He cries, ‘For me sleep is fatal’ For my bed is a monster with appetites hateful!” His mother and father look on with despair Thinking ‘poor little chap,’ and stroking his hair.
So they gave the boy pills – the doctor said “two With warm milk before bed and he’ll sleep the night through.” But come the next morning they found their boy gone. That’s the thing about grown-ups. They get these things wrong.
Hi Charlie - so a bit of spit and polish here - also - at the point where the 'spider' is about to eat the boy - as you originally intended - you've got the mum and dad appearing in his room, the implication being that his scream has brought them to his bedroom. It does create the 'problem' that you may actually need a 'mum and dad' model, with some lip-synching abilities, so they can lip-synch along with the narration, but strategically, I assume these models can be built in regards to their requirements to camera, as opposed to them being all-singing, all-dancing assets. You'll see I put the first suggest final verse back in - I think it works, and I suppose as Alan might appear to 'fix a rig', I'm appearing to say 'that works better' ;) Let me know your thoughts. If you're happy, it's all yours and it's over to you :)
6 and 9 look cool to me, 6 has a very Tim Burton look to it.
ReplyDeleteI like 7 it is cool that he has like monster pyjamas!!
ReplyDeletefor me it's 3 - just an ordinary little boy - he could be anyone of us.
ReplyDeleteOkay - 3 polished and tweaked here and there. You can probably start thinking in pictures for these. More to follow as and when.
ReplyDeleteThere once was a boy who was scared of his bed,
For sleep, he believed, would wind up with him dead.
Mother and father said, “There’s nothing to fear”,
As his door they shut tight, saying “Go to sleep, dear!”
But the boy, he knew better. The boy was aware
that his bed was a monster and his room was its lair.
So night after night, and despite ma and pa’s prattle,
The boy and his bed waged their ongoing battle.
Out go the lights, next, a sickening motion
As the boy’s wall-to-wall carpet becomes deep like the ocean
Where somewhere below in all that fathomless dark
His bed circles slowly like a ravenous shark.
The book and image
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https://www.filesanywhere.com/fs/v.aspx?v=8b71648d5c6174b5a26d
And...
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Bedtime Story
ReplyDeleteThere once was a boy who was scared of his bed,
For sleep, he believed, would wind up with him dead.
Mother and father said, “There’s nothing to fear”,
As his door they shut tight, saying “Go to sleep, dear” ¬
But the boy, he knew better. The boy was aware
that his bed was a monster and his room was its lair.
So night after night, and despite ma and pa’s prattle
The boy and his bed waged their ongoing battle.
First out go the lights, next, a sickening motion
As the boy’s wall-to-wall carpet becomes deep like the ocean
Where somewhere below in all that fathomless dark
His bed circles slowly like a ravenous shark.
So still must the boy be - he can't lose his head.
Or lose it he will between the jaws of his bed
It’s down there, he knows it and it’s coming up fast!
So high up on the wardrobe he climbs like a mast.
The boy’s eyes are so heavy, and yet sleep he must never
For his bed never rests in its dreadful endeavour.
And now like tendrils its sheets they encircle his tummy
So as to wrap the boy up and wrap him tight as a mummy.
Stuck fast like a bug, and his bonds getting tighter
He sees the bed creep toward him, not a shark now, a spider!
But the boy can’t escape! He gives a blood-curdling scream!
“Oh, but darling” his mum says. “It’s just a bad dream!”
They boy tells them ‘No!’ He cries, ‘For me sleep is fatal’
For my bed is a monster with appetites hateful!”
His mother and father look on with despair
Thinking ‘poor little chap,’ and stroking his hair.
So they gave the boy pills – the doctor said “two
With warm milk before bed and he’ll sleep the night through.”
But come the next morning they found their boy gone.
That’s the thing about grown-ups. They get these things wrong.
Hi Charlie - so a bit of spit and polish here - also - at the point where the 'spider' is about to eat the boy - as you originally intended - you've got the mum and dad appearing in his room, the implication being that his scream has brought them to his bedroom. It does create the 'problem' that you may actually need a 'mum and dad' model, with some lip-synching abilities, so they can lip-synch along with the narration, but strategically, I assume these models can be built in regards to their requirements to camera, as opposed to them being all-singing, all-dancing assets. You'll see I put the first suggest final verse back in - I think it works, and I suppose as Alan might appear to 'fix a rig', I'm appearing to say 'that works better' ;) Let me know your thoughts. If you're happy, it's all yours and it's over to you :)
*the* boy tells them 'No!' - typo, sorry!
ReplyDeleteThank you for all the help Phil! I like it, it does sound much better. We can make the parent issue work as well.
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